The life Of...

Im currently workin on some song..
any feedz appreciated...

Yo I started life-harassed, as i look back i might-collapse//
rewrite-the-past, use to just grab the mic-for-cash//
found delight-in-grass, use to smoke and light-fast//
as night-passed, thought to myself fa slight-possiblities//
with my-abilities, gettin bucked is a high-probability//
fight-still-in-me, stood there to watch my homies-die//
lonely-cries, everybody called-me-shy, fooled-me-by//
coldness-lies made me think that i was too weak to-start//
sololy tear crews-apart, relied verbally to the mic to get to-hearts//
thru-parts use to reminisce and think what am I-doin//
life-ruined, drinkin to many high-fluids, hated on by light-crew-kids//
I-knew-it, had me blind, didnt know where my future will-lead//
or when i will-reach my goal and how many kids in my way will-bleed//
we'll-see, really I just want someone to stick a gat to my dome and kill-me//
feel-me? why kids describe my flow as illy i don know but I still-be//
grab my milli, and continue to say whats on my-mind//
but scars from my past makes me remember my-kind//
my-rhyme unforgiven and unforgettable to many that have come in my-way//
walk nights, dead by-day, wishin i can turn to an angel and just fly-away//
yet i might-stay, yet as tears-fall, i grow fearful that the end is near-us-all//
armageddon and apocalypse approachin killin all thats cheerful//
peers-fall, watchin so many I grew up with go straight-to-they-grave//
tryin to provoke the use of violence, cuz theres nothing hatin-can-save//
statin-lifes-made, yet dunno what keeps holdin-what-left-of-me//
thinkin to myself I am the only person that controllin-my-destiny//
its cold-keep-death-away-from-me, tryin to regain my sanity//
hated on everyday, just thought f**ck it all ya just fan-of-me//
vanish-me, look at my life i cant stand all-this-stress//
look at my fallin-rep, thinkn i got more but all-is-less//
all-thats-left, is my ability to reminisce about history//
daily throwin fist-you-see, why im still alive is such a mystery//
hits-to-me, are painless because my body is nullified-of-pain//
mental scars sentimentally are causing crying-brains//
dyin-pains, tears from my mind cryin out for a touch-from-the-light//
darkness enravels me yet I am guided by my love-for-the-mic//
blood-drippin-from-fights, yet my heart feels no emotion from numbness//
when I got into this game didnt know it will come-to-this//
now i run-this-bitch yet i am feelin my days are numbered//
someone just put an end to me and send me to endless slumber//

Nice . some big multies there.. i would def like to hear its audio.. Flow was dope. Lites were little bit streched but no matter.. Dope shit.. keep it up.

this was nice. the rhyme scheme was advance which definately made the flow. as area said above, this can be pretty good if you make an audio of it. overally consistency was there. Vocab was nice.. Decent peice..enjoyed reading.. Keep them comin.

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thanx for feeds guys

those multies were slick son, really had me freestylin. good shit for audios, Real tak. You done its audio till now?

ah! What can i say?
Dope..
Very nicely written. It was rhyming flawlessly.